Evil Lurks Within Us – Part 1

Evil Lurks within us

The crack of thunder pulled me out of a deep sleep. As I became more fully aware, a bright flash of lightening lit the sky and my whole deck was illuminated. The wall that faced the beach was all glass allowing a full view of my deck. The roof over the deck kept the rain from directly hitting the windows and glass doors.

I couldn’t see the ocean from where I was lying, but I knew the waves were crashing wildly onto the shore. Another crack of thunder and the adrenaline raced through my body. I am terrified of thunder and lightening storms and was reaching for something to pull over my eyes when I noticed a man standing on the deck just outside the double glass doors.

I went to scream as I tried to reach the call button for my nurse, but couldn’t get a sound out. Another crack of thunder sounded just when there was another flash of lightening. The storm was right on top of us.

The man didn’t move and then I noticed on the next flash that he wasn’t there anymore. Perhaps I had dreamed it. I am taking so many pain medications and sometimes I do hallucinate. I decided to not wake my nurse and risk scaring her as well.

I waited with bated breath, but there was no sign of him with the next flash. I decided that I must have dreamed it and eventually went back to sleep.

A light tap on the door and my nurse, Susan, stuck her head in the door. “Good morning Mary. How did you sleep last night?” she asked as she began pulling the covers off of me in preparation to getting me up, washed and dressed for the day.

“The storm woke me and I had trouble getting back to sleep right away.”

“What storm?”

“Wasn’t there a violent thunder storm last night?”

Susan was looking at me quizzically. Wrinkling her nose in thought she slowly shook her head. “I don’t think so,” she said finally.

I mulled that over for a bit as she headed to the doors to open them and let the fresh air in.

“That’s odd,” she said.

“What’s odd?”

“There is quite a bit of sand on the deck and some of it actually looks like footprints.”

To read part 2, click here or here for Part 3.


About Tessa

My name is Tessa Dean and I am an author and blogger. My writing styles vary and I love writing using prompts. I am also writing my first book, a Memoir entitled "Government Property - A Memoir of a Military Wife".  This is being published on the blog rather than the traditional way. I am putting up chapters as I go along. I keep my blog filled with useful content, stories, and poems. Plenty to keep you busy. I have also been interviewed by blogs and had other posts published on many different blogs. I also wrote a series of articles on Bipolar Disorder for IBPF (International Bipolar Foundation). I am in my 60’s and disabled which allows me plenty of time to write to my heart’s content. I live in southern New Jersey and have 3 children and 5 grandchildren. My oldest grandchild is a Sargent in the United States Marine Corps.
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16 Responses to Evil Lurks Within Us – Part 1

  1. El Guapo says:

    Very twilight zone! I like it.
    Glad your muse has returned.


  2. Creepy. Love the use of the sandy footprints at the end. Very well done!


  3. Wisper says:

    Interesting. I’d like to see where this could go. Nice touch with the sandy footprints at the end. One minor concrit – I’d take out the second reference to glass when describing the doors and the room. You’ve already said that whole thing is glass. Just a thought. Great job!


  4. jannatwrites says:

    I like the ending! The sandy footprints are proof that she isn’t losing her mind. Maybe the nurse is a heavy sleeper? 🙂


  5. Jennifer Worrell says:

    Wonderfully creepy! LOVED the ending. With all the storms lately, this really hits home. I won’t be looking out on my deck tonight!


  6. timkeen40 says:

    Excellent short story, Tessa. It is good to find your blog.



    • Tessa says:

      Tim, thank you for stopping by. I am glad you liked my short story. I am thinking about doing like a few others do and make it a longer version by using the prompts week by week. I think I have this week’s prompts for Write On Edge and Trifecta combined into one story that is a continuation of this one. I think LOL!


  7. Annabelle says:

    Creepy! I like that as an opener — so much potential.


  8. I was paranoid as a child of people looking in my window at night. Freaky. I shall read more.


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