Evil Lurks Within Us – Part 7
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“I have a confession to make.”
Mary closed her book without saying a word. She glanced up at Susan. This ought to be good!
“Don’t you have anything to say, Mary?”
“No, this is your show. Don’t let me interrupt.”
Susan looked sick. She finally sat down after glancing at the door again.
“Uh…” Another glance at the door. She was obviously worried about something.
Mary waited, forcing Susan to break the silence.
“I never meant to hurt you.” Again she glanced at the door.
“Go on.” Mary wasn’t feeling very sorry for her.
“Look, I started working for you and I felt sorry for you. I thought your husband was sweet and caring. I never meant for this to happen.” Another glance at the door.
“So far you haven’t told me what this is about and why do you keep glancing at the door?”
“Tom started seducing me and he really poured the charm on. He had me believing that you were just blaming him for your own clumsiness in falling down the stairs. I am sorry about this, but we began sleeping together a few weeks ago. Last week when you were at your mother’s he confronted me outside and told me that he expected me to get rid of you by any means necessary. He didn’t care as long as I did it. We had a terrible fight as I am sure you both heard.”
“You really expect me to believe you Susan?
“Please Mary, he is going to be back any time now and he mustn’t know that we talked about this. He, well, he hit me last night. I didn’t want to believe he was as violent as you claimed. I thought you were exaggerating.” She pulled up her sleeves to show Mary her arms. They were covered with bruises.
Mary sat quietly processing what Susan had just told her. She remembered the scene on the beach yesterday. They sure looked awfully chummy.
“Why should I believe you Susan?”
Just then Tom’s motorcycle could be heard in the distance. Susan’s face lost what little color was left in it.
“Look Mary, we made up yesterday on the beach. I let him believe I was going to take care of you, but I can’t do it. You are in real danger here and so am I if he finds out we talked.” Susan began to cry.
Mary wasn’t ready to show her hand just yet. She just sat there watching Susan weep. The motorcycle was almost to the front of the house.
“Susan wipe your eyes NOW!”
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Tessa
Ooh, there’s a twist. Evil, evil man. I did have a problem with this line “Mary remained silent forcing Susan to say something to break the silence.” I think maybe too many silences? I don’t know.
Love where this went. Nice job!
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Thank you Shelton! You are probably right about the silences.Thank you for stopping by and reading. I am so glad you are enjoying this.
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Definitely built up the tension! I had the same issue as Shelton with that one line. Need to eliminate one of the silences.
I’m curious to see what Mary is plotting
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Thank you! I edited it to say what Wisper suggested. Only 1 silence now. Thank you everyone! 🙂 I am glad you stopped by to read this!
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Creepy, dark, and sinister. I love the overtones you’re creating here and am thoroughly enjoying the story so far. I do agree with Shelton in that this sentence – “Mary remained silent forcing Susan to say something to break the silence” – needs a bit of fixing. Maybe something like- “Mary waited, forcing Susan to break the silence.” Just a thought!
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Thank you Wisper! I have edited it to contain your line. I think that works great! 🙂 Thank you for reading!
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Interesting dynamic – Mary is betrayed by Susan and now Susan is trying to help Mary. I’m really curious to see where this goes.
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Oh me too Janna, me too! 🙂 Thank you for stopping by!
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That certainly ups the ante! Satisfying to see where the hints from past weeks were leading.
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Thank you for reading Annabelle! I appreciate you stopping by! 🙂
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Mary sounds like she’s got some hidden strength the other woman doesn’t suspect. Very interesting
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Yes she does. Thank you for stopping by and reading. 🙂
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