Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers
Hide and Seek by Teresa Dean Smeigh 2015
“Ready or not here I come!”
There was silence all around Jenny. She looked around the trees and bushes around her by she didn’t see a bit of movement.
“Timmy, Tommy come out please.”
Silence. Where could they have gone?
She looked off into the distance where 2 huge rocks were standing out on the open fields next door. She saw a cowboy heading towards her.
“What are you boys doing?” the angry man asked.
Two little figures came out from behind the stones. “We’re sorry,” they squeaked.
Jenny ran towards them.
“I am sorry for the trouble they caused.”
“And you would be?”
“Jenny Foster.”
“She’s our nanny,” Tommy said.
“Well Jenny, what do you think the punishment should be for trespassing?”
“Uhhh,” Jenny stammered. The boys hid behind her.
“I think Jenny should have dinner with me tonight.”
“I, uh,” she looked at the handsome cowboy.
“Go Jenny, we don’t want a spanking,” they chorused.
“What’s your name”
“John Barker.”
“The John Barker?”
“None other!”
“Oh, yes.”
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Great story! “The” John Barker? LOL! Her little hide and seek game may have started a love affair. Thank you so much for participating in Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge!
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Thank you ! That was what I was thinking. I tend to stick with dark stories, but decided to try a possible love story this time.
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You did very well!
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Very sweet! I looks like there might be love in the air.:)
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I think there might also. I usually write dark stories. That was probably one of my first love story types.
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🙂
I hope she’d have a wonderful dinner!
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We shall see! Thank you for stopping by.
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This is a beautiful love story. Haha, loved reading it 🙂
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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!
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did you start this once before?
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I have it on both blogs and this is part one and then there is now a part 2.
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I thought you’d had another part 1, though; am I wrong?
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One part one and one part 2. This is part one and there is a part 2 at https://finallyawriter.com/2015/08/11/hide-and-seek-part-2-prompt-from-mondays-finish-the-story-august-10th-2015/
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I don’t know, maybe I’m remembering something different; it was the one where you said you got confused; does that ring any bells?
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No these are brand new stories. That was called the cottage and I just deleted it off my page of short story links since it never really went anywhere. You can read the pieces separately because they all need beginnings, middles and ends.
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was it the same picture?
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I really doubt it since it is different people presenting this prompts. Maybe one had stones in it I don’t remember.
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just seemed familiar – but seemed like the other story starter/finisher was more reminiscent of Lion,Witch,Wardrobe with it being a portal and them disappearing so guess was expecting this one to be like that but seems going in a different direction with this one
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If I take it further it might be a love story. Just don’t know if it is going further. These prompts don’t like serial stories so it would have to be on my own if I want to go further.
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reminds me of those romance books
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It would be something like that. I don’t know if I will take it further.
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oh, well, it was cute anyway; sometimes we just need a little; like in a magazine
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