FRIDAY FICTION with RONOVAN WRITES Prompt Challenge #5 – Judy and John – Love me Tender

FRIDAY FICTION with RONOVAN WRITES Prompt Challenge #5

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Part 1 is John and Judy.

Part 2 is The Honeymoon

Part 3 is The Flight

Part 4 is The Hospital Under Siege

Part 5 is Love me Tender

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Judy and John – Love me Tender – Part 5

written by Teresa Smeigh December 2015

“Marlon,” John struggled to speak. “I want nothing to do with you or your gang. Sorry about your Pa, but what he was doing was illegal not to mention burning down my cabin.”

“Marlon, let my mom out of here she wants to know how my dad is.”

“Sorry Judy girl, but dear old Pa is dead.” Came a voice behind Marlon.

“Cindy what are you talking about?”

“I just made sure dear old dad didn’t make it out of surgery.”

“You? Killed our father? Are you crazy?” Judy felt tears spring to her eyes and put her arm around her mother.

“David is gone? Cindy what have you done,” Joan asked dry-eyed and seriously.

“The police haven’t realized that the gang made it over here and have revenge on their mind,” said Cindy and “besides Marlon here is my boyfriend and you killed his pa, so I killed ours.”

Don’t anyone move or you all die.” Marlon raised his gun. Just then they heard shots fired somewhere in the building. The first in the building so far.

“Cindy, how did you kill your father,” Marlon asked her.

“With my knife.” She pulled it out and it was covered with blood.

Joan refused to cry. She had prepared herself for this many, many times over the years.

Judy bent over. “Marlon what is she doing,” asked Cindy?

“Oh my God, I am having a miscarriage. I never got the chance to tell John so I never mentioned it to anyone else. It hurts,” she wailed.

“Hey Marlon and Cindy let her go get checked out,” Joan finally showed some emotion.

“No way. We are going to end this here and now.”

“Get up Judy and you and Joan walk over to John,” said Marlon

Judy started to move and she came all the way up with a knife in each hand. Her aim was perfect and she took both Marlon and Cindy down. She grabbed Marlon’s gun and Cindy’s knife. She felt nothing over the death of her sister. She was on the wrong side of the law.

She cleaned her knives and put them back into the holsters on her ankles. She rushed to John. He was still weak, but conscious.

“Is it true we are going to have a baby?

“Yes, John, a baby. I am 3 months along and no miscarriage.” Joan came over and hugged the 2 of them.

We need to find a different room since we don’t know who is firing, the cops or the bad guys,” Joan said. “Give me the gun and I will check the hallway. Judy help John walk to the wheelchair.

Just as they transferred John to the wheelchair, another gunman said “Hold it!”

A shot was fired from the hallway and the chief of police came in followed by David limping along. The second gunman was down.

“David you are alive, Cindy said she killed you.”

“She killed another gang member and went looking for her mother.”

Just then Cindy moved. “Judy I knew you would have your knives on you and I took a chance you wouldn’t believe my story and let you throw that knife at me. Not my good arm at least.”

“Sir, the siege is over. Hospital cleared.”

“John get back into bed and I will send the surgeon in here to check you out. Cindy you were foolish, but it worked so I won’t arrest you. Get treated! Everyone out of the room so John can rest. You can come back tomorrow.”

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Constructive Criticism is appreciated as always.

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About Tessa

Teresa (Tessa) Smeigh is now in her 60's and still going strong despite her disabilities affecting both physical and mental abilities. She has bipolar disorder (mental), Fibromyalgia (nerves), degenerative disc disease (spine), and arthritis (joints). Despite that she is active in Mental Health Advocating, writing for www.IBPF.org (volunteer for non-profit) and has 5 blog posts already published by them. She is also working on 2 fiction books (mysteries). She keeps her blog filled with useful content, daily devotionals (She is a Christian), stories and poems. Plenty to keep you busy. She has also been interviewed by blogs and had other posts published on many different blogs. She has 3 blogs so far http://www.tessacandoit.com and http://www.finallyawriter.com and http://www.sunnythoughtsandprayers.wordpress.com She is from Deptford, NJ. Her family and blogs keep her busy.
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14 Responses to FRIDAY FICTION with RONOVAN WRITES Prompt Challenge #5 – Judy and John – Love me Tender

  1. luckyotter says:

    Nice writing style. I liked this. I’m following you on Twitter now btw.

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  2. Ronovan says:

    Good story idea. A couple of things, I think Cindy saying “…our dear old Dad…” would have been a good way to indicated she and Judy were sisters. It took me a while to fully get that. And maybe a reaction from John about Judy and her knives. Maybe he knew about it but it seemed from her character so far it would have been a surprise how she reacted and used the knives. Pace was pretty good. 🙂

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  3. Tessa says:

    I am a little confused. I did mention in several different ways that they were sisters right in the very beginning ——-“You? Killed our father? Are you crazy?” Judy felt tears spring to her eyes and put her arm around her mother.——— and the knives were going to be part of the story that John knew about if I can fit it in. Remember John has connections to that gang and he and Judy were together. I figure either he or the gang teaches her. Plus Cindy knew about the knives. I don’t have much time to work on them since I do so much writing, but I love writing stories too so I try to fit them in.

    If I decide to go further with this it is going to take a lot of work and filling in. I am in the middle of another one that started this way.I kind of call it my outline. I have a story and it just needs lots of filling in.

    Thanks Ron!

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  5. Ritu says:

    I am enjoying your developing story!

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  8. Tessa, I know I’m late to this game, just now finding and reading this story so you’re probably not working on it now but I, too, was confused by the knife thing; didn’t think Judy knew anything about what John was involved with

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    • Tessa says:

      John taught her a lot of things as they were close, but she wasn’t supposed to know so she had to pretend not to know, plus she found out that mom knew everything dad did. He wasn’t supposed to take to her either. I am still working this out in my head, plus all of that will be taken care of if I decide to make this a book. I am doing the best I can.

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