Sunlight
Sunlight, so intensely bright,
Nothing to block out the light.
Shade your eyes, cover your skin,
Mustn’t let the sunlight in
Need relief from it’s bright glare.
Open your eyes if you dare!
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This week’s Trifextra challenge:
On to the weekend challenge. As you’ll recall from your elementary science class days, the structure of the earth can be divided most simply into three sections: core, mantle, crust. Here’s a diagram.
Image courtesy of Danilo Rizzuti / FreeDigitalPhotos.net
Give us 33 words from it. Interpret the prompt however you wish–literal, metaphorical, or somewhere in between. If you would like to use the image on your own blog, you must properly credit it.
my eyes! my eyes! 🙂 nicely done.
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Thank you! Next time heed the warning 🙂
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haha love the rhyming! 🙂 Thank you for sharing!
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Thank you Kim! Rhyming is more my thing although I have written some that don’t. Thanks for stopping by.
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Love the rhythm u have created here-interesting take:-)
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Thank you! Glad you stopped by. I am better at rhythm when I write a poem. I don’t write a lot of them because I can only write them when the spirit moves me.
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I can relate t that-I have till recently been dabbling in poetry(non-English mostly) & I agree with you-it comes to me only when it hits me at some level:-)Am glad to be here among such great talents-hoping to add some finesse to my writing by the time the year ends:-)
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Welcome and good luck with your goal. It is attainable.
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Thk u Tessa,hope so:-)
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How great! This took me back to laying out by the pool this summer!
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Sunlight is my enemy. Can’t handle direct sunlight. Thank you for stopping by!
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I need my sunglasses just to read this! Nice.
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Thanks Lumdog, some day we just might have to always wear them.
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A poem with rhyming words is refreshing poem to read. I enjoyed the cadence of your words and the energy that this produced.
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Thank you. I much prefer rhyming poems iwth cadence. Glad you stopped by!
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I think I’ll keep my eyes closed 🙂
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Safer that way. Thank you for stopping by!
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I felt myself visualizing being outside squinting. Loved how different it was.
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Thank you. I never know what is going to pop into my head next. Some just write themselves!
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I felt like I was under a solar beam! (: Great job!
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Thanks! At first I was going to have the earth and sun collide but then it went another way. I go with what comes out.
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Kind of an inside-out take on the prompt – neat!
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Thank you! I am not sure how I ended up where I did. Glad you liked it!
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This is my first time reading your poetry I think, and I really liked it. It flowed like a nursery rhyme (aren’t they all really dark anyway?). I loved it!
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Thank you Sam! Most of my work is dark because that is where my mind dwells so much of the time, but I have at least one that starts dark and ends funny. But you know reading this over again I realize there is another way to look at it than what I was writing. It fits more into what you are thinking. I originally started with the earth colliding with the sun and it wasn’t going to fit and then the whole thing just changed and the rhythm came to mind and I changed it. I find things don’t always turn out like you think they will. Glad you stopped by! Been enjoying the Elven Story.
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I have a book of nursery rhymes my 5 yr old was given by his teacher. In almost all of those there’s some element of dark—rock a bye baby (The cradle falls), Jack n Jill fall and hurt themselves, even Wee Willie Winkle has a sinister tone to it. LOl. Your poem is beautiful in that way. It can be interpreted in so many ways.
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I really do thank you. I hadn’t thought about the dark nursery rhymes until they started making movies out of them.
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