FRIDAY FICTION with RONOVAN WRITES Prompt Challenge #9 Judy and John – The Lesson

FRIDAY FICTION with RONOVAN WRITES Prompt Challenge #9 – Judy and John – The Lesson

Part 1 is John and Judy.

Part 2 is The Honeymoon

Part 3 is The Flight

Part 4 is The Hospital Under Siege

Part 5 is Love me Tender

Part 6 is Thanksgiving Dinner

Part 7 is The Newborn

Part 8 is Recovery From Birth

Part 9  is The Lesson

“Judy and John – The Lesson”

by Teresa Smeigh January 2016

Horrified at the turn of events, Judy and John sit for a minute and comfort each other.

Once they are rescued they head out to John’s recon plane. John gets Gina and Warrior (her German Shepherd) and heads for the nearest firing range.

“John, calm down, dad taught Cindy and I how to shoot when we were little girls.”

“Ok, give Cindy a call and get her over here. She just became part of the mission and you both need to practice.”

While Judy was calling Cindy, John told Gina what he wanted and then decided the outdoor range would be better. They needed to practice on moving targets since they already knew how to shoot.

Gina and Warrior went outside to set up. Judy returned and said Cindy was happy to help out and was only minutes away.

Once she arrived he showed her and Judy the outside range.

Cindy was reading a book, barely listening. “Yo, Cindy! Pay attention!”

“Wait John, listen to this. Ticks and tocks of essential time, sink the spirits lower than wine. What do you think it means?”

“What are you reading Cindy?”

“A spell book, I love magic.”

“Cindy, magic will not bring Michael back, please pay attention.”

“Cindy please, we have to rescue Michael, Mom and Dad, I know Mom wouldn’t have done that if not coerced into it.”

“Ok, already, let’s get this over with. What is this anyhow?”

“An outdoor course with moving targets of good and bad guys. Watch Gina she will run through it twice and then you two try.”

Once John was satisfied that they were trained well enough, he loaded everyone up and headed to the plane. By then word had gone out to everyone to return to the plane for a mission. A cheer went up. They couldn’t wait to get back to duty.

They were shocked to hear what the orders were. No one had realized the baby had been kidnapped and worse, by the grandmother. It was explained that they had taken her husband, David, and that she had to bring the baby to get him back. The group that took the baby were positive he was theirs because Judy had a boyfriend in the group when she and John met.

It didn’t sound like they would harm the baby, but once they had him in their possession they may decided to kill both Joan and David as unnecessary witnesses to the kidnapping.

As they took off they started to try and figure out where they might have gone. Judy was quiet while every one talked.

“Australia,” Judy said. “Near an old Boab tree.”

“How do you know this Judy?”

“Because, they always talked about the old land in Australia and this big old Boab tree that was nearby,” Cindy and Judy said together.

The plane was turned towards Australia and every one settled in for a long ride.

 

 

 

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About Tessa

Teresa (Tessa) Smeigh is now in her 60's and still going strong despite her disabilities affecting both physical and mental abilities. She has bipolar disorder (mental), Fibromyalgia (nerves), degenerative disc disease (spine), and arthritis (joints). Despite that she is active in Mental Health Advocating, writing for www.IBPF.org (volunteer for non-profit) and has 5 blog posts already published by them. She is also working on 2 fiction books (mysteries). She keeps her blog filled with useful content, daily devotionals (She is a Christian), stories and poems. Plenty to keep you busy. She has also been interviewed by blogs and had other posts published on many different blogs. She has 3 blogs so far http://www.tessacandoit.com and http://www.finallyawriter.com and http://www.sunnythoughtsandprayers.wordpress.com She is from Deptford, NJ. Her family and blogs keep her busy.
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8 Responses to FRIDAY FICTION with RONOVAN WRITES Prompt Challenge #9 Judy and John – The Lesson

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  2. Ritu says:

    Loving how you brought the prompt in Tessa!

    Like

  3. Ronovan says:

    I like the way you’re thinking, but I believe your story would benefit by slowing down the pace a bit. There is some confusion about characters for me and some details I think you could use to add a bit more depth to the story. Remember the word count this week was a suggested length, that means write as much as you need to. With you doing a series, ALWAYS remember the prompts are suggestions for you. Yes, I would like to see you using them, but the important part is you are joining in and getting feedback.

    One other thing, and the thing most important is to use Word to check for little editing things that take the reader out of your story and draw attention to the fact they are reading. You have a good story idea that can draw people into it and get them lost in it as well.

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    • Tessa says:

      Thanks Ronovan. I thought I had to follow all the prompts and it kind of took me places I wasn’t planning on going or so fast.

      One problem, I don’t have word, I use a the free Word knockoff. I can’t afford Word and have to use what I can. It is not quite as helpful as Word would be.

      Also I apologize for some silly mistakes, but I have cognitive problems and some things just don’t come as easy as they used to.

      Your comments are most useful, thank you for taking the time to give them.

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      • Ronovan says:

        Try Grammarly.com. They have a free version and it even works in comment sections like this. I have it downloaded to work WITH Word but it is used instead of Word and it works inside the post editor as well. 🙂

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